Tornado, Blizzard, and Rain Go to Dinner
(The Sky on a Clear Day from Wikipedia Commons)
Three sisters, Tornado, Blizzard, and Rain, went to dinner with their aunt the Moon. The Moon had prepared a fantastic feast with the greatest delicacies in the universe. Tornado and Blizzard, the younger sisters, were so entranced by the feast they scarfed down all the food as it came. Rain was older and wiser than her sisters and as the meal went on she thought of their mother, Sun. With each course, Rain tucked some of the meal into her purse to bring home to Sun.
After dinner, the three sisters returned home to their mother. The Sun greeted each of her daughters pleasantly and asked how dinner had gone. The daughters began to enthusiastically describe the wonderful meal.
Turning to Tornado, Sun asked her, "Did you bring me anything from the feast?"
Tornado responded, "No Mother I ate every single morsel?"
Upset, Sun replied, "For your selfishness, you will create terrible storms that destroy people's crops. For this, you will be feared and hated by all on Earth."
Turning to Blizzard, Sun posed the same question. "Did you bring me anything from the feast?"
Blizzard responded, "I'm sorry Mother, I was too focused on the feast I forgot to bring anything home."
Even more upset, Sun replied, "For your thoughtlessness, your presence will put fear into the hearts of all on Earth. You will bring ruined crops and the fear of winter starvation. For this, you will also be reviled on Earth."
Turning to Rain, Sun asked her, "Did you bring me anything from the feast?"
Shaking out her purse, Rain handed her mother the morsels of the meal she had saved.
Delighted Sun replied, " For your generosity and thoughtfulness your presence will be praised by the people on Earth. Your coming will bring crops and prosperity, for that you will be loved on Earth."
That one dinner is why Tornadoes and Blizzards terrorize the Earth and why Rain brings prosperity.
Author's Note: This story is based on the Indian Fairytale, How the Sun, Moon, and Wind Went Out to Dinner. The story I wrote has essentially the same plot I just changed the characters. The Tornado and Blizzard are the Sun and the Wind in the original story. The Moon is the Rian in my story. I liked the central theme in the story about thinking of others and remembering your mother so I incorporated that into my story.
Story Source: From Indian Fairy Tales by Joseph Jacobs
Hey there Meghan!
ReplyDeleteI was very intrigued with your story. It was very well set up and flowed very nice. I thought it was very cool how you made all of the different forces of nature siblings. I thought it was interesting how a dinner affected how the earth would be terrorized by the tornadoes and blizzards. I really enjoyed the story and I look forward to your future stories!
Hey Meghan,
ReplyDeleteI loved reading this story based off of the Indian fable. Immediately the reader is able to tell it is a historical fable explaining nature. You use and dialogue kept me interested in reading on and made the story flow very nicely. I think its interesting how the moon is used as the aunt to all three.
Meghan,
ReplyDeleteThis was such a cute and enchanting little story! It was straighforward and easy to read, which is always nice. The use of dialogue is really nice too; it makes it conversational rather than a big block of text, and this engages the reader more, too! With this kind of story, it worked really well that you wrote the characters very one-dimensionally. It contrasted Rain really well, and I think it had exactly the intended effect you wanted. Great job! Looking forward to what else you contribute this semester!
-Moriah C.
Hi Meghan!
ReplyDeleteI like how your story was short and sweet but still effectively communicated the plot and the moral of the story. I do find it a little silly that the mother reprimanded her children for not bringing anything home from the feast when the mother could've just come along with them if they were visiting their aunt, but it seems like a lot of folktales are like that. I think your retelling was super cute, and the changes you made fit really well. Looking forward to reading more of your stories!